Friday, 10 October 2014

Book review - As You Wish, by Cathy Jackson



A beautiful tale of three second-chance loves, this book twines about like a vine, bearing fruit at the end with two lonely people finding love and a lost faith regained. On the way, the vine offers various flowers of wisdom as Daniel faces the many obstacles he has placed between himself and his God.

The book opens with a delightful air of mystery as two strangers meet in a park at dead of night. Neither knows who the other is, and neither is completely honest with the other. The intensity of dark mystery that is conveyed is almost Gothic.

The central question of the book is undoubtedly the male protagonist's faith journey, but it is twined so completely with the love story that the two quests merge into a harmonious whole. Very nice writing, and a well thought-out  plot from a writer who obviously is blessed with a deep and informed faith. The beautiful treatment of the age-old problem of evil on its own makes the book worth reading.

This book will appeal to anyone who is, or wishes he were, close to God. The specific faith setting is Christian, but I am sure there is plenty here for those of other religions too.

As You Wish is available from SMASHWORDS.

Thursday, 9 October 2014

Book review - Dragon Sword, by Susan Brassfield Cogan




I found Dragon Sword immensely entertaining. It's a fast-paced, action-packed urban fantasy with a smart-arsed young heroine. Unlike most books I have read in this genre, though, it doesn't fall into the trap of taking itself too seriously, so a leaven of humour lifts the tone throughout, like yeast bubbling in warm bread. And the dragons! Ah, the dragons. Who doesn't love dragons, and good, noble dragons are even better.

This book is evidently the second in a series, and another common fantasy series mistake Cogan has deftly avoided is banging on about forerunners. There's enough backstory that one isn't left floundering, and one is aware that there's a book before this one, but the point is not laboured and one has all the information one needs.

As far as form goes, the work has been edited to a high standard, and I was delighted to see this, for it is a common failing with indie writers that quality issues are neglected. Chapter heading quotes from the Tao Te Ching provided a delightful counterpoint to the book.

Dragon Sword, along with Ms Cogan's considerable body of work, is available from Smashwords.

Friday, 3 October 2014

On Self-Revelation in Fiction Writing

It's a truism in writing fiction that you must show, not tell, your reader what is happening. And a good writer either bears that constantly in mind, or it comes naturally to him. 

What we don't always realise, however, is what else you are showing your reader with every word that comes out of your keyboard. 

To write is to expose yourself. This is particularly true of fiction. In a textbook or treatise, tight focus on the subject matter may leave the writer entirely out of it, but with fiction this cannot be so. Your book is the product of your mind, and just as observing a dog or child can tell you a lot about the person who's brought him up, so in our fiction do we reveal ourselves.

Now I am not speaking here of writers such as Robert Heinlein and John Norman, who keep pausing in their books to deliver a fourteen page lecture about their own social, political, or sexual views. That kind of exposure is quite deliberate (although in fiction, always a mistake, but we are not concerned with it here). I refer rather to the unconscious revelations that infuse every piece of fiction, and have generally been made unconsciously. 

Like most things in life, this is a two-edged sword. 

On the positive side, a writer's personality can shine through, illuminating his work with warmth and kindness. A good example of this is Could You But Find It, by Robert Cilley. The author's deep and kindly knowledge of human nature infuses the whole work and adds gloss to his writing.

Other knowledge about a writer may also be a necessary result of the work. For instance, you don't read my own story, User Pays, without discovering that I'm a Socialist. A lawyer can't read Lynne Cantwell's Pipe Woman series without realising that she is in the law herself, and knows her way around a mediation. Political stances and specialist knowledge, where present in a substantial degree, will always be observable, and that's by no means a bad thing. And I don't read much erotic fiction, but I'd be willing to bet that reading a number of books of that kind by the same author would give you a pretty fair idea of where his own sexual tastes lie, or even of his unfulfilled fantasies.

What, though, of the less pleasant revelations we may make about ourselves? I have an example in mind, a book I read recently: Cherry Cobbler, by Jo Hannah Reardon.

This book falls into the pseudo-genre of Christian Fiction, or Inspirational Fiction as I prefer to call it, for this kind of work could just as easily be concerned with some other faith. I'd already read another of Reardon's books (Crispens Point), liked it a lot and given it four stars in my review. That book was a charming romance, squeaky clean and full of good Christian principles. A delightful book, and so when I came to read Cherry Cobbler, the second book in that series, I was fairly confident of what I would find. 

In fact I did find all the things I expected to find; competent writing, sympathetic characters, a nice leavening of humour, lots of good Christian messages. All good. But I also found something else, something not so nice. In three places in this book, incidents of cruelty to an animal were treated by the protagonist as unimportant or even mildly amusing. This impaired my enjoyment of the book to such a great extent that, although in every other way it was just like Crispen's Point, I gave it only one star.

Now this is exactly the kind of thing I am talking about when I say that we constantly reveal ourselves to the reader. The three incidents of animal cruelty in Cherry Cobbler were all minor incidents, just a little texture, nothing at all relevant to the plot in any way. They could have just as easily been taken out and left not a ripple. But the cost of leaving them in was high. I'm just one reader, but not only has this writer gained a one star instead of a four star review, but she has lost a reader. Lost a reader who would have gone on buying her books. And I'm not an unusual person. I'm pretty average, really. If I had this reaction, then so, probably, did a lot of other people.

How to avoid this happening to you? It's the kind of thing you need to be picking up in revisions. If you use beta readers, ask them what, if anything, they learned about you in reading the book. If you don't, you need to be looking very carefully for it in your read-through. Your editor might pick up this kind of thing for you, but you shouldn't rely on it. It should be eliminated before the book goes to the editor.

So, bottom line, people - when you're going to strip yourself in public - make sure you have nice underwear on.



Saturday, 27 September 2014

book review - Doreen, by Leonardo Acebo

She's loud, she's foul-mouthed, she's slutty, she's dishonest, she has anger management issues and absolutely no impulse control. She is Doreen McCrullers.

From the first page to the last, this hilarious book grabs you by the scruff of the neck and doesn't let go. You'll gasp with shock and terror. You'll scream with laughter. You'll even have the odd 'awwww' moment as you follow the eponymous heroine and her wildly dysfunctional, but at bottom cohesive, family through a rake's progress of farcical, dangerous and often sordid adventures. From blackmail to shoplifting to theft of motor vehicles to rifling corpses, Doreen will stop at nothing to take care of her children.

Highly recommended to all but the prissy.






Doreen and its sequel, Doreen: Blonde Ambition are available from Amazon

Thursday, 25 September 2014

Book review: The Universe Builders, by Steve LeBel



In The Essence of Christianity, the philosopher Feuerbach posited that man creates God in his own image. In The  Universe Builders LeBel has done, although rather less seriously and more entertainingly, just that, creating gods who are just like us, even down to the jeans and untied shoelaces of the young god. Just the originality of it would have been enough for me to rate it above average, but to the novel premise are added solid writing, likable characters, humour and that favourite of mine, a bully who gets his comeuppance.

Suitable for all ages, this book is a thoroughly good read. It rollicks through the attempt of a young god to survive the sabotage attempts of a workplace bully and secure his place in the prestigious Business, and comes to a very satisfying conclusion, neat but not too pat.

Given the subject matter, I feel I should not close without mentioning that devout readers need have no fears of blasphemy; there is no suggestion of conflating LeBel's gods with anyone's Divine Being, or of disrespect to any faith.

The Universe Builders is available at AMAZON.









Friday, 19 September 2014

Book review: Skylar Robbins: The Mystery of Shadow Hills




It's not easy to write well for children, and Ms Cross has done a superlative job in this entertaining adventure story.

The book starts with a couple of familiar tropes (the creepy old house, the keen boy/girl detective) and in the opening pages I was expecting a standard 'Nancy Drew' kind of offering, albeit very well done. But The Mystery of Shadow Hills unfolds layer by surprising layer, revealing with each turn something that takes us completely off guard. Oh, there's witches. Oh, no wait, the witches are real and dangerous! Oh, but wait....

Skylar is a wonderfully down-to-earth heroine; there are no child prodigies here, no soaring intellects or paranormal abilities. Just an ordinary little girl with a consuming passion and the patience to learn to use her tools. As we follow her through some really hair-raising experiences, we watch her discover the difference between real and false friendship, and after a few false starts, find her way onto a solid path of common sense.

A wonderfully enjoyable read for ages 8 to 13, but able to be enjoyed by all ages.

Skylar Robbins: The Mystery of Shadow Hill is available from Amazon for Kindle and in paperback.

Wednesday, 17 September 2014

SIMPLE AND CONTINUOUS TENSES MADE EASY

A lot of beginning writers have difficulty with the difference between simple and continuous tenses. Once you understand the purpose of them, though, there's really no difficulty.

Starting with the past tense, as the distinction is the most readily apparent, let's consider the operation of simple and continuous past tense.

PAST SIMPLE: Rover ate a bone.
PAST CONTINUOUS: Rover was eating a bone.

In the simple past tense, the action described is complete. The entire action of Rover eating the bone all happens within the confines of the sentence. At the beginning of the following sentence, he has finished eating it. Of course, you might go on and describe him eating it, but that's in the nature of a recap (Rover ate the bone. He went at it like a mad creature, tearing and slobbering.) In the most simple narrative, the next sentence moves on in time. (Rover ate the bone. Then he had a big drink out of the water bowl.)

In contrast, in the continuous past tense, the action described is ongoing. At the end of the sentence, Rover is still eating away at that bone.

Thus we may see that the continuous past tense is used to describe a state of affairs. For example:


When I walked into the kitchen (simple past; action completed) I froze in horror. (simple past; action completed)
Rover was eating the Sunday roast, all over the floor. (see the difference? This is telling you what is now going on, and it's still happening). Fluffy was in the corner, vomiting. (again, she's still golloping away).

Now let's apply this to the present tense. As with the past tense, there are two forms of it.

PRESENT SIMPLE: Fluffy kills a seagull. 
PRESENT CONTINUOUS: Fluffy is killing a seagull.

In the present simple, the action, again, is complete. At the end of the sentence that is an ex-seagull. It has ceased to be. Only a carcass remains.
In the present continuous, what we have is a point-in-time snapshot. Fluffy is killing a seagull. Right here, right now, this is what's happening. Help! Get the broom! He's killing it! You still might save it if you act quickly because the act of killing is NOT COMPLETE.

A good rule is always to use the simpler form when it does what you want, reserving the more complex form for when the simple one doesn't work.

EG: I walk into the room. Rover eats the Sunday roast.
See how that completely doesn't work? Here, we are saying that Rover eats the roast, commencing his depredations only after you walk into the room. The two sentences look disconnected and weird.

I walk into the room. Rover is eating the Sunday roast.
See the difference? OMG what's he doing, that I JUST CAUGHT HIM AT!

This same distinction applies to every tense. A rule of thumb is that whenever you have the participle (eating, opening, whatever, things ending in -ing) you have a CONTINUOUS action. It is the same in the future. 

EG: When you next see me, I will drink coffee. (I will have a coffee with you even though I have not been doing so). 
When you next see me, I will be drinking coffee (I will be slugging down the black stuff at the moment you walk into the cafe).